Edits, Recons, and Changes (By Episode)
July 2, 2006
Episode 1: Emphasized Todd's attraction to Sylvie. "Todd insisted to himself that it was safe to bring her up when he was around, but really, it wasn't."
Episode 2: Aurora->Moda Garden; Introduced the 4 named Mormon characters. "Once they had gone, however, Elder Smith VI, the leader of their congregation, began to look slightly worried. He made sure that three particular youths were nearby."; Emphasized Sylvie's character. "The only thing that even slightly bothered her about this was that sometimes she hurt them, because they got the wrong idea. But deep down she thought that most of them deserved to be hurt, so it wasn't a large bother."; Casually introduced the Mina-Ten Years thing and slightly altered her character. "Mina was an ex-pothead who felt, rather wrongly, that she didn’t have much of a personal personality, and thus strove to be like the most appealing person she could find. She had been doing it for upwards of ten years."; pointed out that Sylvie's parents are asian. "Sylvie’s parents are currently attending the same party as Waldo’s, being one of Lucy's unnoticed asian families"; A number of other minor changes to word choice and grammar.
July 3, 2006
Episode 3: Introduced Jennifer's character more aptly; numerous minor changes to word choice and grammar.
July 6, 2006
Episode 4: Jennifer Consistencies; Waldo opens the door instead of Todd; Waldo consistencies; Various other minor changes
July 7, 2006
Episode 5: Zach's independence emphasized. Few other minor changes.
Episode 6: Nothing Major.
August 9, 2006
Episode 7: Emphasized Todd's "romantic" nature, and Jennifer's mysterious past. Made Waldo's dialogue more realistic.
Episode 8: Todd is no longer Solasis. Removed the mood breaking warning framing the rape implication. Minor changes.
August 10, 2006
Episode 9: Primarily dialogue and narrative fixes. Fixed Mina's continuity, as well as Sylvie's Parents'.
August 11, 2006
Episode 10: Mostly minor gramatical changes. Made stronger mention of Dinah's Daddy's "Scary Place", and their connection to Doctor Ruby. Foreshadowing added as well.
Episode 11: Steve's weapon is now consistently a shotgun; he does not waste bullets; he calls zombies Ghouls; Sunny now hasn't smiled in ten years instead of 5. Minor Gramatical changes as always.
August 16, 2006
Episode 12: Mostly gramatical errors; removed full reference to the war in the Alternate Universe; repaired a couple of character descriptions, in particular Fiona. Changed a "their" to "there". That was an embarassing one.
September 1, 2006
Episode 5: Changed Zach's "loyalty" thing. Also mentioned Becky and began characterization slightly earlier.
Episode 1: Emphasized Todd's attraction to Sylvie. "Todd insisted to himself that it was safe to bring her up when he was around, but really, it wasn't."
Episode 2: Aurora->Moda Garden; Introduced the 4 named Mormon characters. "Once they had gone, however, Elder Smith VI, the leader of their congregation, began to look slightly worried. He made sure that three particular youths were nearby."; Emphasized Sylvie's character. "The only thing that even slightly bothered her about this was that sometimes she hurt them, because they got the wrong idea. But deep down she thought that most of them deserved to be hurt, so it wasn't a large bother."; Casually introduced the Mina-Ten Years thing and slightly altered her character. "Mina was an ex-pothead who felt, rather wrongly, that she didn’t have much of a personal personality, and thus strove to be like the most appealing person she could find. She had been doing it for upwards of ten years."; pointed out that Sylvie's parents are asian. "Sylvie’s parents are currently attending the same party as Waldo’s, being one of Lucy's unnoticed asian families"; A number of other minor changes to word choice and grammar.
July 3, 2006
Episode 3: Introduced Jennifer's character more aptly; numerous minor changes to word choice and grammar.
July 6, 2006
Episode 4: Jennifer Consistencies; Waldo opens the door instead of Todd; Waldo consistencies; Various other minor changes
July 7, 2006
Episode 5: Zach's independence emphasized. Few other minor changes.
Episode 6: Nothing Major.
August 9, 2006
Episode 7: Emphasized Todd's "romantic" nature, and Jennifer's mysterious past. Made Waldo's dialogue more realistic.
Episode 8: Todd is no longer Solasis. Removed the mood breaking warning framing the rape implication. Minor changes.
August 10, 2006
Episode 9: Primarily dialogue and narrative fixes. Fixed Mina's continuity, as well as Sylvie's Parents'.
August 11, 2006
Episode 10: Mostly minor gramatical changes. Made stronger mention of Dinah's Daddy's "Scary Place", and their connection to Doctor Ruby. Foreshadowing added as well.
Episode 11: Steve's weapon is now consistently a shotgun; he does not waste bullets; he calls zombies Ghouls; Sunny now hasn't smiled in ten years instead of 5. Minor Gramatical changes as always.
August 16, 2006
Episode 12: Mostly gramatical errors; removed full reference to the war in the Alternate Universe; repaired a couple of character descriptions, in particular Fiona. Changed a "their" to "there". That was an embarassing one.
September 1, 2006
Episode 5: Changed Zach's "loyalty" thing. Also mentioned Becky and began characterization slightly earlier.
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